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Tuesday, February 15, 2011

Story Update

I've changed the story plan. You know how when you write you change your mind on ideas, that keeps happening. I've rewrote the beginning of Dark Angel Awaken, I'll post it on the blog post for you to check it out. Post what you think about it, was it better than my old beginning? I like it better.

I've changed Angel to a boy angel named Malcolm. Isabelle was a human until she was 10, Malcolm changed her to angel to save her life. She is in her second life as an angel.

Chapter 1: The Vision

           The night before the attack, I had a vision. What I didn’t know was that vision the event would change my life. I couldn’t control what happened that afternoon, I can’t change that now. I wish things were the way they were back then. I was only 10 years old when it all happened. I knew I had powers, I discovered them when I was 7. I just didn’t know enough magic that time.

In the vision the sky was blue and there was something wrong in the air. I was in the forest and heard a scream, it sounded like my brother’s. I hear a ripping sound and my parents scream. It’s snowing and the scene was blurry, it was hard to see through the snow. I see something grey, it looks like a wolf, but bigger. It looked hungry and I tried to run away. I woke up screaming, I sat up and looked at my palms. They were sweaty. I sighed, I didn’t want this to happen. This was the perfect winter vacation, and it wasn’t going to end well.


I got dressed and met my mother outside, she was piling up a pile of lumber. “Isabelle, would you help your father and brother collect firewood.”


I ran down a snowy path and saw my father and brother in a clearing chopping firewood. I picked up some from the big pile and headed back to the cabin. I dumped the logs into the growing pile and heard the scream. I remembered the vision, and ran toward the clearing. I heard my brother’s scream cut off and he was on the ground unable to move. I also saw my mother and father on the snowy ground, they were having trouble breathing.


I heard a growing sound and turned around. It was a werewolf, I never seen one in person before. I was scared and tried to run away, the werewolf jumped and I fell to the ground. I felt pain all over my body and couldn’t move. I felt more pain toward my ankle and I saw the snow was bloody. I got scared and tried to do something, nothing I tried worked. I just lay on the ground waiting for the rest.


A few minutes later I felt the weight lifted and looked. The wolf was off of me and on the ground with a knife in his back. I tried to move, but my bloody ankle didn’t move. It felt broken from the weight of his back legs. I saw a boy watching me, he walked closer to me and took my hand. He pressed in my hand and I felt energy flow through me as I was falling asleep. The last thing I heard before I fell asleep was him telling me I’d be okay. Who was he, why did he seem familiar?


I woke up at the hospital the next day, he was holding my hand. The pain was gone, replaced with a new feeling. A feeling I’ve never felt before. He took a look at me, his eyes were a beautiful brown. I felt as if I knew those brown eyes from before. We just stared at each other for a few minutes. He broke the silence, “Hi, I’m Malcolm. I’m your guardian angel.”


I blinked, “My guardian angel?” I paused and continued, “I’ve seen you before, you’ve been following me around.”


He rubbed his chin, “You’ve noticed me. Hmmm, I see you can sense things. Sorry if you felt I was stalking you.”


“Maybe a little, but you were there for me,” I shrugged. “It wasn’t that bad.”


“You need sleep, see you in the morning. We’ll talk some more later then.” Malcolm left the room and his halo glowed as he went outside the room. It was impossible, I was falling in love with my guardian angel.


The next morning I woke up and found a tray with 3 strips of bacon, pancakes, a glass of apple juice, and maple syrup on it. I also found a note on it, it was from Malcolm. It read, you are sweet as maple syrup. He was sweet, that was so nice to say. I looked up and saw his smile at the door of my hospital room.


He smiled and walked to my side, “Wow you are pretty. No wonder I fell in love with you when I first saw you.”


I gasped, “You are in love with me?”


Malcolm shrugged, “I guess I am, I can’t forget about you. I mean that in a way like I love you.”


“Me too, I never expected you to save me so many times.” I smiled, he laughed.


“You are so clumsy, all those times I saved you.” He chuckled a little, “You haven’t changed.” He held my hand and examined it.


“I feel different, not my normal self. I know you did something with my DNA.” I sighed.


He looked at me, “I see you know what happened, I saved your life again. I changed you to an angel to stop the pain.”


“An angel, such an interesting creature. White wings, the key to flying.” I took a look at me hand and smiled. “You are cute.”


“How can we fall in love? I’m not supposed to, that’s breaking the rules.” He scratched his head and paced back and fourth. “Oh well.”


Someone else walked into the room, it was Mr. White, he was my father’s friend. He had gone to medical school and become a doctor. “Nice to see you again Isabelle, it’s been many years.”


“It has, about 3 years now.” I thought to myself and realized, “When I discovered my powers.” I murmured the last part, I knew the rules about magic. No one could find out, or the death penalty.


“Let’s see how you are doing,” he picked up the clipboard on the side table. “Good, good, good. You seem fine, just your ankle is damaged.”


“Probably forever,” I murmured under my breath.


“You will need a brace and crutches. I can arrange that.” John was scribbling on his clipboard and Malcolm sent me a mind thought. You’ll need help, you have magic. You just don’t know how to use it yet.


I can sorta use my magic, not very controlled.


Once you start training you will get better.


Thanks for the help.


No problem, it’s part of the job.


The next few days passed and I started magic lessons. I was so-so with magic, but I’ve been getting better. Malcolm had been a big help with that, I was glad he was there. Or I wouldn’t be here now, I would be with my family. I pray for them to be happy and together, one day I would join them and we would be reunited.

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