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Tuesday, February 22, 2011

Version 3 of DAA

I wrote 3 versions of Dark Angel Awaken, I'm sharing the first version I wrote when I started writing the series. This si a more interesting beginning, but too quick to the point. Here it is, the unwritten version on the internet.

Dark Angel Awaken Version 3

Things aren't alwas as they seem, I remeber the last summer of my normal life. My somewhat human life I mean, not my immortal life to follow. Anything we can’t see or hear, doesn’t mean it isn’t real. That’s what I learned, I guess I learned it too late. I couldn't save my own life before the sound of two cars crashing together. Blackness was all I saw, and ever saw after that. It wasn’t my life choice, it was Quinn’s saving my life.



Chapter 1: Almost Graduation

           
          The sounds of clapping for you, I imagine those for the moment I will walk up the isle to receive my high school diploma from my teacher. I just didn’t know I wouldn’t get it, I would realize in a few weeks. I was in 11th grade and one more year till I graduate, and go to collage. It was summer time officially, and it was going to be an awesome summer for sure. I was going to spend it with Quinn, Hope, and Sammy.



“Hey Quinn!” He looked cute in his white top and blue jeans, the only thing disturbing was the feeling that he wasn’t like everyone else. He didn’t feel human to me, he skipped lunch for almost the whole year and he didn’t get hungry. He liked fruit punch, but it didn’t look like fruit punch. Why didn’t it, I knew it wasn’t?



I didn’t know where I got a 6th sense, I’ve had it since I was born. I can tell if your upset or happy or just plain annoyed, and who you have a crush on. I also had visions of the future, before it happened. A very useful gift, and the only person who I trusted was Quinn. He knew about my 6th sense and thought it was strange like I was a witch or something. He says I’m special that way, but I have trouble reading Quinn at times. He has a secret, I can read that, what is the secret is what I can’t read. I guess I had a secret too, I wasn’t human at all. I didn’t tell him that half of the truth. I had the gift cause I wasn’t completely human.



Chapter 2: Summer Vacation

           
          School’s out! I had to find Quinn so we could have the best summer ever. I jumped in my car and drove to his house, I cut the engine off and approached his front door with a bright smile. I approached the bell and rung it, he answered it but seemed different. I could sense he wasn’t feeling too well, but it wasn’t a fever or a cold. What did he have? We just stood there in silence for a few minutes staring at each other on his door step.


          I didn’t know what was happening. I caught a glimpse of a dark shadow through the corner of my eye and I sensed it was getting closer to me. I didn’t know what it was doing to me, but I was getting dizzier each moment I was standing there. He noticed it and caught me before I hit the ground. I just passed out, I easily pass out. This time it was the dark shadow making me so dizzy I couldn’t stand straight.



When I woke up, it was morning and I found myself on Quinn’s bed. Quinn was on the computer doing something and he seemed different. He wasn’t his normal self, he was more panicked. When he was panicked, something was wrong. I had a IV in my arm, but why? Quinn noticed I was a awake and walked toward me. He suspected me of my true from.



“Are you okay Isabelle?” His voice sounded very concerned and I saw it in his eyes, they were gentle and kind.



“I don’t know what happened out there, I saw a dark shadow and I was getting dizzier each second,” he looked at me weirdly and turned away.



“You saw that?” his voice now seemed curious, but shaky.



“I did, I was nervous. It looked like it was coming for me.” I stammered as I spoke the nerve-wrecking words that froze my mind.



“I don’t think your... never mind. You want to eat breakfast?”



“I’m not what and maybe scrambled eggs and a couple strips of bacon please.” I was thinking of what he meant and I couldn’t read him.



“I’ll tell you when the time is right, and coming right up.” He was about leave the room when something caught the corner of my eye.



Something was wrong and could feel it, what was wrong about the room. Then I had saw a vision. It was me and Quinn in the room when he was randomly attacked by the dark shadow from outside, I had to stop that.



I shouted, “Quinn, watch out!” He didn’t dodge in time,the blow knocked him out. The shadow turned to me, and out of the ordinary my angel came to my side and Quinn saw the truth. Angel got rid of the shadow and I started to heal Quinn, he saw it all. I couldn’t hide the truth anymore.



My angel was concerned about me, “Isabelle how long have you been hiding, and what did you remember since the erase spell was placed on you when you were fighting and I saved you?”



“I remember everything,” I paused, “ and Quinn now knows the truth. Also the spell never worked on me, I faked it. I had a shield around me when the spell was cast.”



“You faked it... why? You promised to tell me the truth always,” Angel passed out.



Quinn got up and bravely asked, “Isabelle, you are not human. You’re a angel, why didn’t you tell me?”



“I couldn’t, I pretended I didn’t know what you meant. I was saved by Angel when I was about 10. That was when the dark shadow started following me, he has been following ever since, he won’t stop until he... kills me.” He looked at me with his big curious eyes.



He seemed to be more stable now, “We should help your angel up.”



“Quinn, I’ll help you. Also hand me that vial on your desk.” Now my voice was shaky, the shadow had never left and was about to attack me again.



“Is it this vial Isabelle, what is it?” He stared at it for a minute and looked at me.



“Yes, quickly throw it to me please.” I was getting more and more weak each second.



“Isabelle the shadow, it’s, here’s the vial!” He tossed it and I quickly opened it as soon as I caught it. The shadow quickly evaporated and just in time, I was about to pass out for no magic was in my system.



There was another silence, and I broke it, “Quinn stop hiding, I know you have a secret.” He stared at me and finally spoke.



“Isabelle, I admit I do. I’m not human either, I’m a vampire. You sensed I was different from the others.”

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